Strong Examples:
* "The essay makes some interesting claims about the impact of social media on teenagers, but it lacks specific evidence to support these claims. You need to provide more research findings, statistics, or case studies to back up your arguments." (This comment directly points out the lack of evidence and suggests specific types of support.)
* "While the essay mentions several studies on the topic, it doesn't adequately explain how these studies relate to your thesis. You need to analyze the findings of each study and explain how they support your argument." (This comment highlights the need for deeper analysis of the evidence and its connection to the main point.)
* "The essay relies heavily on anecdotal evidence from personal experience, which isn't strong enough to support your claims. You need to incorporate more objective research and scholarly sources to strengthen your arguments." (This comment identifies the use of weak evidence and encourages the use of more reliable sources.)
Weaker Examples:
* "Your essay needs more evidence." (This is too vague and doesn't offer any guidance on what kind of evidence is needed.)
* "The essay is not very convincing." (This is subjective and doesn't point to specific issues with evidence.)
* "I'm not sure I believe your arguments." (This is personal opinion and doesn't address the quality of the evidence.)
Key Takeaways:
* Effective comments on supporting evidence are specific and constructive. They pinpoint the problems and offer clear suggestions for improvement.
* The comment should focus on the quality and relevance of the evidence.
* Avoid vague generalizations or subjective opinions.
* Suggest specific types of evidence that would strengthen the argument.
By addressing these points, you can provide valuable feedback to help writers improve their research essays.